The second stanza looks more like a side note than a stanza itself. Especially with the partheses and the blocky puncuation towards the end. The two stanzas don't even look like they belong together either. The more I look at it the more it seems like the first stanza is the bulk of the poem and the second stanza is just commenting on the first stanza. It comments on the metaphore made in the first couple of lines.
"Let the snake wait under
his weed
and the writing
be of words, slow and quick, sharp
to strike, quiet to wait
sleepless."
I didn't really notice that, but you have a point about how the second stanza just comments on the first. Awesome post!
ReplyDeleteThis is a nice post, but I'd like to see a little more. :) Maybe on theme? Diction? Try for a little bit longer post, please.
ReplyDeleteYeah, I think he is comparing the snake to the plant that breaks the stone to reveal what is inside. I liked our discussion on this in class when Josh and i presented.
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